November Blog Chain

I'm participating in my first ever blog chain through Absolute Writers and I'm nervous, nervous, nervous!  The assignment this month: a drabble, which is a piece of fiction of exactly 100 words.  For the sake of NaNoWriMo, we were allowed to go +/- 5 words.  (I'm over by 2)

So why the nervousness?  One hundred words doesn't seem that hard, right?  Well, I've decided to put up one hundred words of my YA WIP, Finding My Escape for my fellow writers to see and comment on.  It had to happen some time, letting professionals view my work.  Enough procrastinating, here it is:

I walked through the door.  It was dark…almost pitch black, and I had this uneasy feeling.  Everything was wrong somehow.  It was so quiet.  I shut the door slowly and started into the living room, tripping over something that shouldn’t be there.  My hand fell into something sticky. 

I heard a sound in the kitchen.

“Mom?” I called barely able to breathe.

“Don’t come in here honey, RUN!”

The sound of a voice being muffled, a struggle, a crash, one feeble whimper and then…           

My eyes began to adjust to the dark and I found myself staring into my father’s dead eyes.

(Feedback solicited and appreciated!)

My chain partners
Bettedra http://bettedra.wordpress.com/2010/11/01/bus_ride/
FreshHell http://freshhell.wordpress.com/2010/11/02/dribs-and-drabbles/
CScottMorris http://cscottmorrisbooks.com/2010/11/03/november-blog-chain-nanowrimo-tribute/
AuburnAssasin http://clairegillian.wordpress.com/2010/11/03/november-blog-chain-drabbling/
Ahelia http://thewriteaholicblog.wordpress.com/2010/11/06/aw-blog-chain-drabble-edition/#comment-2439
Bibbo http://blakemp.wordpress.com/2010/11/11/quickfic-inter-office-memos/
hilaryjacques http://hillaryjacques.blogspot.com/2010/11/aw-blog-chain-dear-john-letter.html
Orion_mk3 http://nonexistentbooks.wordpress.com/2010/11/12/from-deep-daybreak-by-john-sullivan/
Proach http://desstories.blogspot.com/2010/11/aw-november-blog-chain-to-be-maria.html
jonbon.benjamin http://jonbonbenjamin.blogspot.com/2010/11/november-dabble.html
rmgil04 http://writersinprogresswip.blogspot.com/2010/11/aw-blog-chain-drabble-into-light.html
PASeasholtz http://paseasholtz.com/?p=1253
Regypsy http://regypsy.wordpress.com/2010/11/22/november-blog-chain-drabble/